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Re: This Whiskey Glass

Posted By: Bill Ames
Date: Friday, 6 October 2006, at 6:32 a.m.

Hi Rick . . . good to see you posting again!

I like this one a lot . . . strong images, and very crisp.

I'm having trouble getting the sound, though. I stall at a couple words like 'this' and 'the' at the start of some lines. I'm wondering if your timing is different when you read it, yourself. Is there a pause between some of the lines? If so, a bit of space might help.

Good work, here!

--Bill

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Re: This Whiskey Glass
Bill Ames -- Friday, 6 October 2006, at 6:32 a.m.

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